Still Water … #Writephoto

Still Water

Sue’s Photo Prompt

Still waters run deep. Or do they ?

He never answered her question. “What are you thinking ?”

Sarah tried. She had been looking lovingly into his eyes for a long time.

He gazed back. Tom was the strong, silent type. Just what she needed.

But she wanted to dig deeper.

He talked about his day, about work, about sporting events, about projects he was going to take on when he had the time.

Family issues, finances, current events, politics, etc. etc. etc.

Still. What was he thinking ?

It took a while, but she found out. It was a bit of a disappointment.

Nothing. There was nothing else in there.

Mostly, Tom was thinking about how to answer the question without losing her interest.

And also, how long he had to stay at this restaurant table before checking his e mail.

It didn’t work out for Sarah and Tom.

Sometimes, still waters run shallow.

Thursday photo prompt – Still water… #writephoto

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68 Responses to Still Water … #Writephoto

  1. Tom is not as engaging as she would like . I enjoyed how you interpreted the photo.

  2. Rowena says:

    Reblogged this on beyondtheflow and commented:
    I loved this character sketch from Van By the River.
    You always hope there’s more going on behind the surface but sometimes what you see is what you get xx Rowena

  3. LaVagabonde says:

    Sometimes, it is exactly that. =:-O

  4. Judy Martin says:

    I loved the twist on the old saying, Van, Great story and take on the prompt 🙂

  5. I really liked this Van, you are a great writer! xx

  6. Erika Kind says:

    Hmm…. that sounds too familiar!

  7. Nice take on the prompt, Van. My husband swears up and down that he’s not thinking anything. Ha ha. I wonder what that feels like.

  8. C.E.Robinson says:

    Van, this is good writing. While reading this I kind of knew things were going south for Sarah and Tom. Your ending was perfect. (smiling) I’ll never think of that saying the same ever again! Have a memorable Memorial Day Weekend. 💛 Elizabeth

    • Thanks, Elizabeth. I remember a comedian from years ago who made this part of his act. His point…stop asking us…there’s nothing going on in there. ☺ Enjoy your weekend. 💕

  9. So true on so many occasions. My mind is always on, can’t fathom a blank brain.
    Have an awesome day.
    I want to try something exciting! Write a profile of my followers. Most feel good, participate and chances are people see they follow the same people.
    I have several TED Talks, post trashing TSA and Lyme report. I’m tired of Lyme and readers are probably reading about.
    I always appreciate your honest feedback. My health has taken a dip, now my heart wants in on the the action. The heart is so self absorbed.
    I also like getting a group of folks to find Wednesday Funny Videos.
    Any of them sound good.
    🙂
    M

  10. Erica Herd says:

    Ha ha, good ending.

  11. Shallow and not even tempting. Good piece 🙂

  12. This is a great interpretation of Sue’s photo. A very different perspective and nicely executed… 🙂

  13. George says:

    Nice job, Van. I’m anticipating the follow up..:)

  14. macjam47 says:

    I loved the twist at the end. Great take on the prompt.

  15. Soul Gifts says:

    Thought i’d pop in from Jacquie’s party to say hello to a familiar face 🙂 I like your story. It’s always interesting to read different people’s interpretation of the same prompt !

  16. Nurse Kelly says:

    Love this, Van! Hope to see more flash fiction from you! I think you can write just about anything! Your story is very relatable, unfortunately… I just love how you used the prompt.
    Hope you have a nice holiday weekend! xoxo

    • I really like flash fiction, sorry I don’t participate more often. Maybe it’s my short attention span, but I love messages in fewer words. Thanks for the compliment. And enjoy your weekend as well…we’re hot over here !!! I’m living in the A/C. 💕

      • Nurse Kelly says:

        I think messages in fewer words are here to stay – due to many short attention spans!
        Turned on my AC last night – 88 degrees! Might be dodging showers here and there, but yes, the heat of summer is with us for the weekend! 🙂

      • 🌞 🌞 Please don’t tell anyone, but I liked the cool, rainy Spring. Not ready for summer sweats. 🌞 🌞 ugh.

      • Nurse Kelly says:

        Yeah, if it stays like this, it’s going to be a long, hot summer! Stay cool, Van! xo

  17. ellenbest24 says:

    Hi i popped from Jacqueline’s blog party and read this snatch of a story. I remember the days when trying to connect with ‘the one’. J ust when you think you have found ‘him, you realise there is little or no substance beneath the ripples on show. Good story 😇 nice to meet you.

  18. To bring some humor to this unfortunate reality you write about, I once heard Jeff Foxworthy say, “You women always want to know what we men are thinking. It’s not that complicated. We want to know what every woman looks like naked and who is closest to the fridge to get us a beer!” 😀

  19. joey says:

    Very well done with the words and the image. Still waters bore me, too. Poor Sarah.

  20. Wow. So awesomely done. You have captured the essence of most relationships perfectly in a photo challenge. Unfortunately this is a true story for many couples but if we realise it at the right time and are willing to admit it, things could change. Brilliant work again 🙂

  21. Love the last line.

  22. Thanks for posting. I enjoy reading your blog and I am looking forward to continued reading.

  23. lisakunk says:

    Yep. Fits our conversations. “What did you learn about so and so you had lunch with today?”
    “What do you mean? We ate lunch.”

  24. Pingback: Photo prompt round up– Still waters… #writephoto | Sue Vincent – Daily Echo

  25. KL Caley says:

    Haha! Great story – loved the twist. All too familiar – lol. KL ❤

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